tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6982202736459935345.post516766284537513145..comments2009-04-09T14:11:06.664-07:00Comments on J200 blog--NY Times Health: President Promises to Bolster Food Safetyliz.stickelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09131970911367907256noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6982202736459935345.post-10124717809757525752009-03-22T16:14:00.000-07:002009-03-22T16:14:00.000-07:00I was able to relate to your critique of this arti...I was able to relate to your critique of this article since I had a similar experience while reading it. The writer does make the article gage the readers' interest up from the very start. The lead instantly grabbed my attention with the statistic somewhere along the lines of 95 percent of hazardous foods go uninspected. That made me immediately drop my fork. But picking back up on the story, I noticed that the way the NY Times writer attributed the President with a "Mr. Obama" made him seem more like the common man who could relate to the public at large, rather than an aloof big shot who made all the calls at the White House behind closed doors.<BR/><BR/>This story lacks a fair representation of sources. If we could extract even one quote from a member of the FDA or even private auditors about President Obama's plan to push for more food oversight/government inspections, the story would be more balanced. Equal light would be shed on the government and local groups.<BR/><BR/>The last paragraph ended with an alarming statistic, which gave the readers something to take away from reading the story. The writer knew just as the readers were about to walk away from the article remembering absolutely nothing that he/she needed to take one last chance to shock the readers with a statistic about the death count of people dying from contaminated, half-cooked food. <BR/><BR/>Well done! (no pun intended)crystal khttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07696300256419053692noreply@blogger.com